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Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: Zloska_of_yy on January 02, 2006, 04:53:20 am

just some lyrics, it's only half finished so there's more to come even though I've been pondering on it for quite a while. hope you people like it.

mob justice

hate flows like honey
so sweet so easy
it oozes right outside his door
pitchforkes and torches at the ready
mob justice it's time to do some good
the sinful living has made another victim
or so they say, so they say

pray he won't, pray he won't
pray for absolution
down on his knees

love such a virtue just a sin
never thought it would cause the state he's in
claiming innocence a claim that's just
but look to the left and you can see him run
to no avail, there's no escape
they will purge the disease from his veins
though he's not ill
broken bones will be his medicine...

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: whitehouses81680 on January 06, 2006, 02:27:12 pm

wooh, talent over here

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: Emmyspiano on January 22, 2006, 12:13:36 am

"pray he won't, pray he won't
pray for absolution
down on his knees "

That is my FAVORITE part! You have some talent.

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: whitehouses81680 on January 22, 2006, 04:24:38 pm

it sounds like all of vanessas song melted together

""pray he won't, pray he won't "
---SAY YOU WILL SAY YOU WONT

"down on his knees "
----BRINGING HIM TO YOUR KNEES

"hate flows like honey
so sweet so easy"
---BOY YOU SWALLOW TRUTH LIKE HONEY

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: Zloska_of_yy on January 31, 2006, 01:13:50 pm

well that mixture of vanessa carlton songs was unintentional.

maybe something subconscious.

btw still haven't finished it, bit of a writer's block  :(

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: whitehouses81680 on February 03, 2006, 08:30:10 pm

it not a bad thing, u could be the next ms. carlton

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: Zloska_of_yy on February 08, 2006, 10:52:22 am

wow thanx, that's a great compliment.

not a woman however.  :D

Title: pitchforks and torches
Post by: Zloska_of_yy on March 17, 2006, 02:54:41 am

Got a really boring day at the university yesterday and managed to write a few lines. Woohoo!!
The new lines are:

words and dirt, it's killing
there are ashes on his lips
it just proves he burns so easily
how I'd like to tell him
there's no need to breathe
no need to breathe
and they are the self proclaimed stainless steel
but that don't mean
that their hands are clean
they just like to think they've seen the light


The last line is subject to change, but I think the rest is pretty much there to stay.
And btw the whole "no need to breathe" thing.... I hope it doesn't come off as psycho or violent in any way. In my opinion the sentence has something strangely comforting. That's why I put it in.