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The Race
« on: June 06, 2003, 04:16:40 pm »
I'm not much of a poet, but here's my foray into it for all the Nessaholics

my whole life is a race
running all these years
I thought I could stop
but you weren't near

sometimes faster
sometimes slower
sometimes higher
sometimes lower

I slowed down once
maybe twice
or could
it have been thrice

I'm growing tired
I'm growing weary
I'm seeing the road ahead
it's getting less dreary

I won't stop
until I'm there
I can't stop
until I'm there

it's coming up
I'm nearing the end
I can almost see it
around the bend

The curve is rounded
I make it past
there is no line
alas

there is a line
I see it part
doesn't say finish
simply says start


What do you think?

Comments?
Ti Amo Michelle!

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The Race
« Reply #1 on: June 09, 2003, 06:51:51 am »
i think it's really good!

keep writing!  :D
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Thanks
« Reply #2 on: June 09, 2003, 04:49:03 pm »
Thanks Tia; I appreciate the input.

I've got a couple more; just haven't posted them yet!
Ti Amo Michelle!