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Other Topics => Creative Endeavors => Topic started by: aleera84 on February 18, 2004, 05:15:36 am
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Well instead of creating a thread each time i write something i thought i might just make a thread for all of them.
Here is my first one, its not very good because I havnt really written anything like a song before, well i have tried lol.
This is something personal that I guess I wanted to share with everyone.
It is called: Sunburned Face
When innocence was taken she casted it aside,
her family, no longer there to catch the tears she cried.
As her legs cave in she falls to the ground onto the dead grass below,
her head rest in her hands, the things he could demand are running through her mind.
Thinking back to yesterday, the games she played,
a child lost in the crowd.
Her innocence was lost.
He thinks that hes above her as he cuts into the core
Hours run by as her story goes untold.
Taking sips of poison, dying from month to month
living in the shadows, all she wants to be is found.
In the distance she hears familiar voices calling out her name.
Dirt under her finger nails scraped from the surface of betrail.
Rain falls onto her sunburned face,
the calling getting closer
She waits as the anticipation grows a little stronger
wishing the victum she became wasnt any longer.
He thinks that hes above her as he cuts into the core
Hours run by as her story goes untold.
Taking sips of poison, dying from month to month
living in the shadows, all she wants to be is found.
The pain fades away after years of rememberance
Courage regained as she buries her pain
Free from the monsters of her damaged soul.
As rain falls onto her sunburned face he thinks that he is above her.
But he was deeply wrong.
Well I guess you guys dont have to like it but feedback would be cool.
:D Thank you for reading
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Wonderful.
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Thank you Tia :wink:
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No problem hun! :wink:
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"Rain on a sunburned face" I like it! 8)
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"Rain on a sunburned face" I like it! 8)
So much so that you stole it! Sue, Katie, sue!! :-P :wink:
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"Rain on a sunburned face" I like it! 8)
So much so that you stole it! Sue, Katie, sue!! :-P :wink:
pah do you know everytime you take a pic from a site and put it in a sig, its illegal too :wink:
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"Rain on a sunburned face" I like it! 8)
So much so that you stole it! Sue, Katie, sue!! :-P :wink:
pah do you know everytime you take a pic from a site and put it in a sig, its illegal too :wink:
I do. I break many laws :D
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Hhahaha i wouldnt sue Scotty :D Im just glad he likes the phrase.
Here are my notes that Scott kindly hosted for me:
(http://www.mdcplus.com/web/pianoguy88/katie's_notes.jpg)
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That is amazing Katie, I never knew you wrote songs or poems! I loved reading that!
Scotty and Tia doing illegal stuff?! 8O Do I want to know?! lol.
xox
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Scotty and Tia doing illegal stuff?! 8O Do I want to know?! lol.
Well, not together!!
See how my mind works 8O
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Scotty and Tia doing illegal stuff?! 8O Do I want to know?! lol.
Well, not together!!
See how my mind works 8O
LOL! I think that answers my question in that I do not want to know about this one! lol :D
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Scotty and Tia doing illegal stuff?! 8O Do I want to know?! lol.
Well, not together!!
See how my mind works 8O
LOL! I think that answers my question in that I do not want to know about this one! lol :D
I always break the Copyright and Design and Patents Act of 1988.
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I dont usually write things, anything i do write i pretty much keep to myself.
Im really glad that you like it and that i dont have to erase it LOL.
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I love it! very very impressive... :D Can't wait to read more
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I liiiiiiiiiiiiiiiike it! i hear it as a ballad with guitars in it. keep posting your stuff!
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omg, i thought id posted on this, lol. i think i must have just sed how much i loved it to u. well yes, it rocks katie!! ur a really gd songwriter, keep going!
id love to see some more!
Lisa xxx
ps. im wit georgie on the not wanting to know wot u get up to tia. lol
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im wit georgie on the not wanting to know wot u get up to tia. lol
You people... :roll:
No curiosity...
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oh i have curiosity, lol just not wanting to know wot illegal stuff u get up to. haha
but anyway, back to katies brilliant writing :)