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Other Topics => Creative Endeavors => Topic started by: VanessaCarltonMania on December 28, 2007, 12:38:40 am
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Verse 1:
It's gettin' too dark, too dark to see
And I'm still stuck in this reality
Too late to be found
Am I too late to be saved?
I'm crying out for help
I'm willing to be changed
(chorus)
God, please take my hand.
I know you'll understand.
'Cause you know that I'm afraid
even when I don't know what to say.
Verse 2:
Even when I'm wrong
I know you'll walk along
'Cause I don't know how to figure things out
When I'm without,
without your love.
Bridge:
I'm down on my knees
Can you hear my pleas?
Can you hear me cry?
Do you wonder why?
(repeat chorus)
Verse 3:
I can never ever forget
that I can always be at rest
because you'll always hold my hand.
You're the one with me 'til the end.
(repeat bridge + chorus)
Tell me what y'all think...criticism is accepted as long as your nice about it!
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Another song by me! :D
Verse 1:
You've messed me up
So I'm gone now
I'm packing my bags
and taking my last bow.
Verse 2:
You need to figure it out
'cause now you're without me
I waited patiently
'til that reality kicked in
but it never did and now
you're wandering blindly
(chorus)
Without me, I know you can't breathe
Without me, you're wandering blindly
Without me,you're lost in this reality
Without you, I'm better off honestly
Verse 3:
The path you took
It's not even in a fairytale book
I trusted you, but you never gave me the truth
now all I'm looking for isn't with you
And you're left drowning in your solitude
(repeat chorus)
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those are really nice. do you have the melody in your head? or are they just lyrics. I write my lyrics with the melody in my mind. and, unless i can get a band and a studio, that's where they're staying for now.
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Wow, I really like those. They're really great.
You know, it never matters how much skill you have on the piano to make up songs, because even my 8 year old sister made up a song (a little repetitive, but really great, actually).
So maybe you could write some piano arrangements to go with your songs. They're really nice.
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Well, I have an idea of what i want it to sound like...
But i haven't actually started to work it out on the piano yet...
I'm not that good at making up melodies though. :razz:
So, I think I'm gonna ask a friend of mine who has been playing the piano and guitar since he was a little kid to sorta lead me. :D
Thanks for the comments y'all! :D :D :D
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Its inspired by HALF A WEEK BEFORE THE WINTER! :D
End Of Time
[Verse 1]
Half a week before the end of time
He sat down and told her
they would never be together
and so she began to cry
[Chorus]
The end of time brings everyone to tears
No one can believe it
They've spent so many years
[Verse 2]
She cried and she wished he loved her
half as much as she loved him
but she knew that wasn't possible
something so wonderful could never happen
[Bridge 1]
So she begins to sing
sing for new beginnings, but...
[repeat chorus 2x]
[Verse 3]
So time is coming to an end,
and no one ever believed it could happen
Never believing what was said
They never believed what was said.
[Bridge 2]
So they begin to sing,
sing for happy endings
and....
[chorus again]
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I really like that song, I can just imagine the music for it...to my taste, but I don't know if it would be anything you imagined. I like your strong but simple direction to lyrics. Great work!!
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I really like that song, I can just imagine the music for it...to my taste, but I don't know if it would be anything you imagined. I like your strong but simple direction to lyrics. Great work!!
i have a few riffs...but i still dont know how im gonna put it all together..
i want it to be sorta slow but not to the point where it sounds like a lullaby :razz: :lol: :D
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I really like that song, I can just imagine the music for it...to my taste, but I don't know if it would be anything you imagined. I like your strong but simple direction to lyrics. Great work!!
i have a few riffs...but i still dont know how im gonna put it all together..
i want it to be sorta slow but not to the point where it sounds like a lullaby :razz: :lol: :D
Yeah, definately not what I was thinking, but it's great work, and just because I have a crazy imagination for lyrics that I haven't made, doesn't mean I'm right about anything, lol.
I am better to writing lyrics that I didn't make, because it makes me a little more detatched from them, and easier to focus on the music rather than how I want the lyrics to be done. I would love to write songs with my cousin, who is 16, because she has the most amazing way with words, and being a music-writer myself, I would love to put our talents together.
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HAHAHA! :D :lol:
Well...I have no idea what im doing when it comes to tunes...
I can sing, write songs, and play the piano...but i cant put together tunes in my head!!!! :razz: LOL
p.s: I got one of my friends to make up a tune for me! :D
He said he'd write the notes down for me and make me a MIDI file!!
I cant wait til hes done!!!! :) :) :)
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Well, as for me whenever I wanna make a song I always find the melody first, then the lyrics. Finding the melody is a one thing, writing the lyrics is another...somewhat harder tho..I'm not that good writer as you are.. :)
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Well, as for me whenever I wanna make a song I always find the melody first, then the lyrics. Finding the melody is a one thing, writing the lyrics is another...somewhat harder tho..I'm not that good writer as you are.. :)
for me its the opposite... :D :razz: :lol:
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I'm not that good writer as you are.. :)
THANKS! 8O :D :D
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Well, as for me whenever I wanna make a song I always find the melody first, then the lyrics. Finding the melody is a one thing, writing the lyrics is another...somewhat harder tho..I'm not that good writer as you are.. :)
for me its the opposite... :D :razz: :lol:
Since I'm not a horribly good writer, I prefer to make the music first, now.
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This is a new song i wrote like 5 minutes ago! :lol:
Comment Plz! :D
Friends of foes are still her foes
and now there's left one question:
How did they know?
Blinded by the eery light she sees,
her soul sails through life
fluttering impatiently
Burdened by this mistake,
she can never forget,
until she can no longer wake.
So she sings a song
that brings along
the peace of mind she hoped for.
It's nothing new
this is something we're all used to
But now its time to go.
*this is dedicated to someone I know named Vanessa... *
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This is a new song i wrote like 5 minutes ago! :lol:
Comment Plz! :D
Friends of foes are still her foes
and now there's left one question:
How did they know?
Blinded by the eery light she sees,
her soul sails through life
fluttering impatiently
Burdened by this mistake,
she can never forget,
until she can no longer wake.
So she sings a song
that brings along
the peace of mind she hoped for.
It's nothing new
this is something we're all used to
But now its time to go.
*this is dedicated to someone I know named Vanessa...*
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I really like the feel of that song.
Is it going to be a slower song?
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This is a new song i wrote like 5 minutes ago! :lol:
Comment Plz! :D
Friends of foes are still her foes
and now there's left one question:
How did they know?
Blinded by the eery light she sees,
her soul sails through life
fluttering impatiently
Burdened by this mistake,
she can never forget,
until she can no longer wake.
So she sings a song
that brings along
the peace of mind she hoped for.
It's nothing new
this is something we're all used to
But now its time to go.
*this is dedicated to someone I know named Vanessa... *
Wow, did you really write that in minutes time? That's awesome! I like it, specially: Friends of foes are still her foes and now there's left one question: How did they know?
If write a song, it takes about a week or so. I waste my times waiting till I got inspirations. The quickest one probably took one day, with a help of my friend.
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Yeah, it takes me around 5 to 10 minutes...cause I usualy only write songs if I have an idea in my head and an inspiration....
The words just come to my head and I write them down! :D :lol:
Sometimes the idea comes to me when I'm out of the house, so now I keep a little note book in my bag and I write the idea or song down :razz: :D
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I wrote this song yesterday night! :razz: :D
ALL SHE ASKS
Verse 1:
She's sinking fast,
grief swallowing her whole.
Distraught and lost,
this is when she needs you the most.
Chorus:
And you're never there to hold her hand.
She should've known.
She could never make you understand.
Verse 2:
Every breath she takes is for you,
please listen, she's telling the truth.
It might be her last breath,
and it's for you.
(repeat chorus)
Outro:
Look her in the eye.
Here eyes speak the truth.
Look her in the eye.
That's all she's asking you to do.
(the chorus might be repeated here....but then the outro would be Verse 3...)
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I really like the feel of that song.
Is it going to be a slower song?
i want it to sound something like She Floats....
cause its supposed to be kinda sad :razz:
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I really like the feel of that song.
Is it going to be a slower song?
i want it to sound something like She Floats....
cause its supposed to be kinda sad :razz:
Yeah, that's cool.
And I really like "All She Asks". It's nice.
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^^ thanks!!! :D
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new song i just wrote! :D (btw...i ONLY write songs when I'm in a certain reflective mood...which is happening now....so i will probably have brain freeze when I've thought everything through and sorted everything out :lol: LOL)* and this one is not as good as the other ones i wrote yesterday!*
Verse 1:
I see the future as you see the past.
I see things coming,
coming too fast.
Chorus:
So I sing a song
and you sing along.
Quiet nights,
baby, sleep tight.
Verse 2:
I hold your hand
and I sing that song.
You let me go, You let me fall.
How can things go so wrong?
(chorus)
Verse 3:
I blow a kiss
It lands amiss
I'm begging you to sing along-
My life is an unfinished song.
(repeat chorus)
bridge:
I'm begging you to sing along.
My life is an unfinished song.
Sing along, finish my song!
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I really like the chorus of that one. I love how it seems.
If you know what I mean.
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I really like the chorus of that one. I love how it seems.
If you know what I mean.
Yeah, i get what u mean! :)
Thanks! :)
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I blow a kiss
It lands amiss
Nice! I like that...
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Thanks! :D
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Verse 1:
He told me he was the hero who stole me
i was taken to a place where all dreams are happy
he took my hand and danced with me
i wanted to keep him, my sweet memory
Chorus:
he held my hand and walked with me
i wondered how he could see
the good in everyone
the good in me
Verse 2:
I never wanted to make him unhappy
And Im sorry now, Im so sorry
But what was I supposed to do when stuck in my misery?
Should he have just let me be?
Chorus
Bridge:
He'll always be my hero
never my thief
He'll always steel me away
away where i can remember when...
(repeat chorus)
-For SpiriT_SLASH :D
THANKS!!!! (K)(K)-
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That song started when i asked my friend (SpiriT_SLASH--> his nickname)
if he was my hero or thief...?
and then he said :"im the hero that stole u"
so i wrote that song...
and btw i have got a crush on this guy...hes THE GUY thats in all my songs!
But at least i can send this one to him...and he LOVED it...and he actually helped me with a few rhyming words! :lol: :D LOL
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^Thats REALLY good, it reminds me of a vanessa song!
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yeah...i asked him if he was my Hero or Thief because of the song :razz: :lol:
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Hey do any of you have the Powertab Editor on your computer?
If you do, I'm inspired by the lyrics to one of your songs, VanessaCarltonMania, and I'd be glad if you could hear it.
Though I'm not done yet. I've got this tune stuck in my head and it's not coming out. Grr.
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Hey do any of you have the Powertab Editor on your computer?
If you do, I'm inspired by the lyrics to one of your songs, VanessaCarltonMania, and I'd be glad if you could hear it.
Though I'm not done yet. I've got this tune stuck in my head and it's not coming out. Grr.
I don't have that on my computer...but if it's something i can get off the internet I can download it :)
And im glad i could inspire someone...its flattering
:oops: :oops: :razz: :razz: 8O :D Thanks!
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Fooling with her
While fooling with her, u were fooling with me.
Oh baby, y cant u see?
Everything I do is for you
Every breath, every word i say is true.
So give me a break and get going, get gone-
I cant believe ure still fooling with my heart.
I want this to be done.
While fooling with her, u fooled with me.
Why does my heart make this such a tragedy?
I know Im not yours, oh but when will you learn
that hearts break at the tiniest word?
and oh boy, youre the one i thought i deserved.
P.S:
(see if u can interpret the event behind that :) :lol: :lol: :wink: )
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No Reward
Im fighting for no reward
stranded on this island
with no ocean to surround me
in the place of the ocean, its u
Im fighting with all my heart
giving u all i got
but ofcourse there is no reward
nothing, nothing.
on this island im just a tiny dot.
Im fighting for u
but u never seem to care
im fighting my way through thunder and lightning
but u never seem to be there
Ive cried myself an ocean
Ive cried myself a sea
When will i cry enough to drown u and save me?
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Wise Man
Chorus:
It's all meant to be
someone once said to me
was this wise man really wise?
did he see, see, my sweet demise?
"Beware my child, said this wise man to me.
The path u have chosen, it will never come to be."
But as i look up into ur eyes, i swear i can't breathe.
Are u the path i shuld've never taken?
Are those the words i wish he'd never spoken?
As i sit here and think it through,
I realize i don't want to live without you.
This Wise man saw my sweet demise.
He made it clear, though i never believed him to be wise.
With eyes misted over, tension hung in the air.
My heart beating at a rate unimaginable.
I wished u were there.
I feel like I'd rather witness this sweet demise of mine than give u up.
Oh wise man am I running out of time?
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My Present Reality
You are my present reality
But i want u in the past
You are constantly reminding me
what ive done wrong
what has passed.
Hoping and praying didnt work for me
i guess its just not meant to be
i cant help but want this all over
i cant help it, cause u still adore her
My present reality is making me so unsure
I cant hear any sound
no one knocking at my door
Its like the spirits inside me calmed down
but now i have this sense...im overwhelmed
I will miss the thought of me and you
but i guess theres nothing else left to do
I wonder if u will still think of me when its all done
I wonder if its worth this, worth me coming undone?
I will miss the thought of you and me
but ive tried and theres noone else i can be
crying will do no good
i shuldve known, i shuldve understood.
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Over You
*i want a love i dont have to lose
somehow life will go on, even if i dont want it to
I guess the light will shine on me one day
i need to move on, i need to give my heart a break*
i wont need u to survive
i cant wait til that day
i wont need to hold on to every word u say
im waiting on my heart to change
my mind is already made up
im waiting so patiently
but it seems as if im stuck
(*chorus*)
Im ready to give up on u.
This idea, and this pain its put me through
It might take awhile
but i will get there one day
it might take awhile
but im sick of this pain
bridge:
its going, going....
im waiting for it to be gone
im waiting for this to be done
im waiting for my heart to breathe
im waiting to be freed
(*chorus*)
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This song isnt one of my best, but I liked it cause it has some Latin in it...and I think Latin is a beautiful language since it is the base of most other languages.... :D (A)(A)
The words in [---] are supposed to be whispered either in between words or in the background....
Harmony in Discord
I hear a voice
A voice and nothing more
Empty words filled with no trace of remorse
[ vox et proeterea nihil]
This cruel, cruel world
Well, we're against it all
This poetic frenzy [furor poeticus]
Love conquers all!
[amor vincit omnia]
The art of loving [ars amandi]
it comes from the heart [ex animo]
Harmony in discord [concordia discors]
It passes away the glory of the world
[sic tansit gloria mundi]
We are tossed by the waves, but we never sink
[flactuat nec megritur]
Time flies [tempus fugit]
in the blink of an eye
just a blink! [tempus fugit]
Concordia discors
sic tansit gloria mundi
ars amandi
ex animo
any comments or suggestions are appreciated! :D
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Cool, I really like Wise Man and My Present Reality, and the one with latin in it is neat. That's a new idea. :D
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Cool, I really like Wise Man and My Present Reality, and the one with latin in it is neat. That's a new idea. :D
Thankss! :D
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I know its been a veryyy long time since ive posted any sons but i have PLENTY to share now :razz: :lol: :D
Here is one called ' LOVING U '
though getting over u is hard
i dont think its the hardest thing ill have to do
loving u was hard enough
after all of that, why is it punishment i have to go through?
loving u was like hell
it burnt and stung
yet i still wanted more
loving u tore my heart apart
and now im sprawled out, face down on the floor.
i still say it doesnt hurt
my heart has gone numb from the pain
if i waited long enough, i wonder if u wuldve figured it out
well, its too late, im done, im sick of the rain.
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She's Gone(poem)
and she wills him away
as he creeps into her memory
and she wishes he could stay
but she sees there's no future
and she tries to hide her tears
but it's so hard sometimes
and she wants to have something
to comfort her at night
so she runs on her own
wishing he'd hurt like she does
and she sings him a song
wondering if he'd ever stop to hear her
and as her breaths become shallow
and the days are growing short
she holds on to this man
and the hope that he once gave her
well he doesn't know what he's done to her
and she'll never tell him
that just won't happen
her life is slipping away
as she tries to cry out to him
he's not by her side
but she says what she has been longing to say
she screams his name and cries out
'I LOVE YOU!'
and it all slips away
the light in her eyes begins to fade
she's gone, she's gone
will you miss her now?
she's gone and not coming back
she's gone...