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Title: Holding On
Post by: Ms.Redd on May 30, 2003, 08:23:34 pm

HOLDING ON
A cool breeze and fresh smell
Sounds of forming puddles
Pitter-Patter of rain drops against
The great outdoors
Wondering where you are
And knowing you think of me
Eyes shut and I can feel
Your arms around me
Surrounding me, embracing me
Holding tight
Breathing in and I smell you
Sweetness of a caring sensitivity
And listening to words that
Are spoken without speaking
Rain continues on until it stops
I remember your not here
And no longer does the warm embrace
And sweet scent surround me
Rather bitterness and sorrow
Keeps me company until
Forever finally passes on

Title: Holding On
Post by: Tiger Baby on May 31, 2003, 08:18:20 pm

Awesome. I like it, Mal!

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Title: Holding On
Post by: sweetdang on May 31, 2003, 09:00:14 pm

Deep. I like it : D

Title: Holding On
Post by: Logikal X on June 01, 2003, 09:46:46 am

i like this one much :mrgreen:

Title: Holding On
Post by: Ms.Redd on June 02, 2003, 04:18:52 am

thanks everyone, glad you liked.

Title: it's ALL good but....
Post by: Alecs on June 02, 2003, 07:40:29 am

this part is Killer:

Rain continues on until it stops
I remember your not here
And no longer does the warm embrace
And sweet scent surround me
Rather bitterness and sorrow
Keeps me company until
Forever finally passes on

(deep stuff, for real)

Title: Holding On
Post by: Ms.Redd on June 02, 2003, 07:51:19 am

Its neat that you guys all seemed to like this one best... Because when I wrote it, I didn't really like it... But I thought I'd hit submit anyways.