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Title: Suicide
Post by: aVriL1036 on June 01, 2003, 07:26:26 pm

He screamed as his world whirled into a blur
For all his life, in his decisions, he wasn't always sure
He just watched as his dreams were shattered in a distance
Still, he tried to get up, for he knew he still had a chance.

The temperature around him dropped, seizing him in freezing panic
As memories of his tormented past crushed reality into pieces,
He tried to smile to suppress his rears from flowing, but ended up in vain
With all his frustration and anger, nothing seemed to ease the pain.

He tried to look up in order to find hope, but the sun seemed too bright
Thinking of his ambitions, he knew that this time, he had to fight
Yet, right then and there, the cloud of darkness loomed atop his head
Hopelessness and pessimistic thoughts got the worse of him instead.

The sound of a bullet piercing through a himan's skull echoed throughout the place
Of flamboyance, contentment and happiness, the man was left with no trace
The wrath of the ocean's waves was tamed into an unforgiving calmness
As a gust of wind reduced the magnificence of the place into nothingness.

Now, he tried to stand up as his world turned into nothing but a blur
For all his life, he knew and he was sure
That he would only be watching as his dreams shattered in a distance
And he couldn't do anything about it, for he only wasted his chance.

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Avril is hugging her pillows. 8O

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Title: wow
Post by: radiotot on June 09, 2003, 11:13:01 am

wow. that's good insite for a 14 year old. eventhough i'm only 13 i can tell that that's really good insight. it's good, no it's great. at least i think so.
keep it up,
radiotot

Title: =)
Post by: aVriL1036 on July 07, 2003, 02:35:51 am

Hah. Thanks. ;o)

Title: Suicide
Post by: x Jennifer x on July 07, 2003, 09:05:55 am

nice

Title: Suicide
Post by: VanessaLover03 on July 14, 2003, 12:33:27 am

wow

Title: Suicide
Post by: Tia on July 29, 2003, 06:53:31 am

8O

Title: Suicide
Post by: sweetdang on August 01, 2003, 10:14:04 pm

Whoa.. ^_^

Title: Suicide
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 02, 2003, 06:20:50 am

man... I'm glad I decided to read that. You're very talented....

nice job

Title: Thanks. =)
Post by: aVriL1036 on August 18, 2003, 02:26:30 am

Thanks, thanks, thanks, thanks, thanks, thanks. ;o)

Am flattered by your words, extremely. =)

And it's been daaaaaaaaaaaaays since I last went here to check on this. =/ Oh, well. ;oD

Title: Suicide
Post by: badsrx7 on August 19, 2003, 09:28:30 pm

Wow.

That's powerful.

Title: SAM!
Post by: aVriL1036 on August 20, 2003, 01:44:33 am

Hi, Sam.  :D

Title: Suicide
Post by: badsrx7 on August 20, 2003, 05:06:36 pm

Hellooo ;D

I really like it..

Title: Awww... =)
Post by: aVriL1036 on August 21, 2003, 02:17:36 am

You do? Well, thank you.  :oops: