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Title: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Tiger Baby on August 21, 2003, 09:05:07 pm

Hes out there, hes near me
Hes insane, hes got to be
I can feel him all around me
I feel his presence, it surrounds me
Every minute he draws closer to me
No one knows where he could be
Someone must stop him, and his insanity
I'm going crazy, hes getting to me
He has been out there for days
I must be the one to stop his evil ways
He hurt me before, but now I'm stronger
He won't be out there any longer
Hes getting to me, I can't sleep
When I do, hes in my dreams
What should I do?
Who can I turn to?
I can't go to school, church, anywhere
What if he does this to someone else? That I could not bear
I lock myself in my room and cry
How could he do this, and why?
I'm going insane
I dare not speak his name
I can feel him, lurking through the neighborhood
I wouldn't go outside even if I could
Hes got inside my head
Hes after me, he wants me dead
He'll get me, mentally and physically
I know it will happen, eventually. . .



Tell me what you think, honestly. I want to know if I should change something, add something, get rid of something, whatever.

Title: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 23, 2003, 02:16:38 pm

I think thats scary Andrea! Ahhhh!

But really really good... but yeah, not that my opinion even matters :)  but I'd change the name... Dark Angel didn't really seem to fit, IMO... that doesn't matter. lol

Title: WOW
Post by: topher8467 on August 23, 2003, 03:04:52 pm

Uhm Andi,

You ever think of calling for help? We shant let him catch you!

That really was quite eerie and intense.  8O

Nice work.

Topher  :D

PS: I agree with Mallory, Dark Angel might not be the best title for it ... unless there's a follow up to it and you kick ass!

Title: Re: WOW
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 23, 2003, 03:42:11 pm

Quote from: "topher8467"

PS: I agree with Mallory, Dark Angel might not be the best title for it ... unless there's a follow up to it and you kick ass!

HAHA

Title: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Tiger Baby on August 23, 2003, 05:15:56 pm

Thanks guys, but I thought Dark Angel was a cool name, thats why I used it ; )

BTW it isn't about me.

Title: Re: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Jophess on August 23, 2003, 05:34:48 pm

Quote from: "Tiger Baby"

What should I do?
Who can I turn to?

THAT IS A LINE TO MY OLD SCHOOL PLAY! LMAO!

Heh... very dark. Damn all stalkers to hell!

Title: Re: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Tiger Baby on August 24, 2003, 06:48:05 am

Quote from: "Nagyovafan"

Quote from: "Tiger Baby"

What should I do?
Who can I turn to?

THAT IS A LINE TO MY OLD SCHOOL PLAY! LMAO!

rofl

Title: umm..
Post by: x Jennifer x on August 24, 2003, 09:15:27 am

lmao...girl. you just wrote about freddy kruger...

Title: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Tiger Baby on August 24, 2003, 09:53:35 am

lol yay! The prize goes to Jen ; )

Title: A story poemy thingy- Dark Angel
Post by: Tiger Baby on August 27, 2003, 02:28:57 pm

bumpo