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Other Topics => Creative Endeavors => Topic started by: Ms.Redd on September 15, 2003, 12:51:03 pm
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Its hard to keep my balance
With my arms so full
And my load so heavy
Its hard to hold this stance
With the days so dull
No sleep comes stead-ly
When I look into the mirror
This is what I see
I see me wrapped up in cover
From what life can really be
I see bruises on my jawbone
And pressed into my eye
I spy lies over the telephone
Of a life I wish to try
Its rough putting up with this
With my head hanging
And my heart so still
Its rough trying to live like this
With my heart not beating
And my soul feels ill
When I look into the mirror
This is what I see
I see me wrapped up in cover
From what life can really be
I see bruises on my jaw bone
And pressed into my eye
I spy lies over the telephone
Of a life I wish to try
You didn't come for me
You refused to help me
You didn't believe me
And now you've killed me
My body's so sore
I don't have a chance
I'll fade away
In a passing glance
-Mallory
(tell me what you thought please)
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aw that is so sad....i am sad now....
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Awww Joey! Don't be sad! *hug*
:)
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aw thanks for the hug.
it's good though...just sad.
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That's great Mal...
Really *sob* sad *sob* though...
I can really relate =\
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just wanted to say I'm writing a piano part to this I think...... *something was kinda flowing earlier, but couldn't get to it because my mom came in and watched me going at it... can't work under that kinda pressure* *nope nope*
Anyways, I got the intro and the bridge part kinda figured already. Working on it. I'll post it up if I get anything out.
-Mal
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You posted this a while ago but i never seen it.....
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You posted this a while ago but i never seen it.....
Yep I did post it awhile ago... middle of the month or so. Oh and ya don't always gotta read stuff if you don't wanna. haha
But hey cool if ya look out for it! :D haha
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You posted this a while ago but i never seen it.....
Yep I did post it awhile ago... middle of the month or so. Oh and ya don't always gotta read stuff if you don't wanna. haha
But hey cool if ya look out for it! :D haha
I like to read and hear what you write. Its really good so I always look for it. Your great!
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I like to read and hear what you write. Its really good so I always look for it. Your great!
Why! Thanks...
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Its true. Anything that I post there is trur. I wont lie to ya. I really like it its good. Some of them make me :D and some make me a little :( but they are all good.
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Well.... hmm. I could say I don't mean to make ya sad (or any one for that matter, *Tia*) But I guess that would be a lie because all music and poetry is all about uncovering some secret feeling. Isn't it? Maybe not, but I guess thats what a lot of my stuff is about.
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Even if ya make us sad its still really good.
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Even if ya make us sad its still really good.
Well thanks. I appreciate the kindness. (Some people believe utter rudeness is constructive criticism. I think that if you don't like it, fine, but at least make it truely constructive. Saying you're crap and nothing else isn't quite constructive. Constructive is a word used for something to build off of or build upon... Some people are to stupid to know that though.)
Thanks for liking it though. Means lots. :)
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Even if ya make us sad its still really good.
Well thanks. I appreciate the kindness. (Some people believe utter rudeness is constructive criticism. I think that if you don't like it, fine, but at least make it truely constructive. Saying you're crap and nothing else isn't quite constructive. Constructive is a word used for something to build off of or build upon... Some people are to stupid to know that though.)
Thanks for liking it though. Means lots. :)
Well ok there is one thing that you can do. You could try to write more and you can try to make more songs.:) That is the only thing that I really have to complain about:) Ok maybe thats not complaining but well.....
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Okay, haha, I'll make sure I get right to it. But right now I gotta go. I think my mom might want her computer when she comes outta the baf'room. tee hee hee!!!!!!! :lol:
Anyways, yeah, I'll make sure and post it when I get something! :)
Bye for now!
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Well.... hmm. I could say I don't mean to make ya sad (or any one for that matter, *Tia*) But I guess that would be a lie because all music and poetry is all about uncovering some secret feeling. Isn't it? Maybe not, but I guess thats what a lot of my stuff is about.
My philosophy, exactly. =)
Can't wait to hear the pianooo!!