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Title: if you only knew
Post by: babyblue43402 on December 21, 2003, 09:24:02 pm

heres a song a wrote recently... i'm really insecure about my writings ol' well here it is.

If You Only Knew


I told the sky my story and it rained hard and long,
It was cold and never ending,
All I could do is sing you this song.
If you only knew oh if you only knew.

I see you in the distance
Longing to be close,
Wanting your arms to comfort me
I wish I could tell you how I feel
But words will not form

I told the sky my story and it rained hard and long,
It was cold and never ending,
All I could do is sing you this song.
If you only knew oh if you only knew.

I’m scared of what may be
I’m scared of what you’ll say
I’m insecure with all my dreams especially
When you’re the one I want to come true.

I told the sky my story and it rained hard and long,
It was cold and never ending,
All I could do is sing you this song.
If you only knew oh if you only knew.

One day I’ll make you smile
And my heart will soar
One day I’ll call you mine ….if you only knew

Title: if you only knew
Post by: Alecs on December 22, 2003, 01:37:16 pm

I really like that song. Especially the part about the sky and how the rain came bursting down. Good stuff. :wink:  Don't stop writing. :)

Title: if you only knew
Post by: Layla on December 22, 2003, 01:40:59 pm

Quote from: "Alecs"

I really like that song. Especially the part about the sky and how the rain came bursting down.

ooooo yeah same here! *claps* very good

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Post by: babyblue43402 on December 22, 2003, 09:01:57 pm

awww thanks guys!!!! :D

I would really appreciate constructive critisism too!

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Post by: Alecs on December 22, 2003, 10:33:55 pm

Quote from: "babyblue43402"

awww thanks guys!!!! :D

I would really appreciate constructive critisism too!

you're welcome! :)

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Post by: Layla on December 23, 2003, 04:19:16 am

Quote from: "babyblue43402"

I would really appreciate constructive critisism too!

errmmmm  :? *thinks* there's no tune in typed words? that's my critisism :D