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Other Topics => Creative Endeavors => Topic started by: amberbeads on May 14, 2004, 07:37:51 pm
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Clipped Wings
It’s getting late
And there’s a light on in the hall
And you’re singing in the shower like there’s nothing wrong at all
And I lie in the dark all alone
And the noises outside leave me chilled to the bone
Out on the street
There’s a dog that’s barking at the ugliness in here
And even out of the room you’re way too near
Images inside my head
Turn almost real as my sheets stain red
‘Cause thanks to the hate that all your love brings
All I have to show are my clipped wings
You call for me
And shatter the silence
I hear you pause outside the door
And I pray that you’ll slip on the wet bathroom floor
But the knob turns
While my eyes burn
And my stomach churns
But I know that you’ll get all of that which you’ve earned
Repeat chorus
The dog on the street reminds me it’s time
It’s too ugly in here and I’ve made up mind
I know you can hear me when I slam the door
But even broken wings can open up and soar
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*sigh* i wish i could do that...
great job :)
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That is one of the best set of lyrics I have ever read. I love it.
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oh wow... thank you so much!
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ooooh i like it!
I also heart your sig! :razz:
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me too... :D
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i have an mp3 of this... it's like 3.5 MB. sorry if my host site is slow, there's nothing i can really do about it.
http://www.onlinerock.com/fans/amberbeads//clipped_wings.wma.
note: i mess up my own song. please don't laugh. i was nervous. :oops: [/url]
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That's amazing! The lyrics and song too both wonderful, don't be so modest you're amazing!! xxx
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i have to be modest or else i feel arrogant... :lol: thanks for your compliments!
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very cool, amberbeads. i'm downloading the song right now.
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That sounds like a dying cat.
My ears will never be the same.
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That sounds like a dying cat.
My ears will never be the same.
:roll:
Great Job, Nat. ;)
-Manda
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That sounds like a dying cat.
My ears will never be the same.
um... fuck you?
disliking the song is fine. but disliking the song and being an ass about it is totally different.
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new link... old one is gone
http://www.onlinerock.com/fans/amberbeads//clipped_wings.mp3
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That sounds like a dying cat.
My ears will never be the same.
um... fuck you?
disliking the song is fine. but disliking the song and being an ass about it is totally different.
Awww boo hoo, just b/c the mean internet ass hole isn't gonna suck up and say something sounds so awesome when it's trash doesn't mean you have to curse and be all mean. *runs and crys, "mommy mommy the big mean internet girl called me names!"*
:roll:
I'd love to see you on American Idol.
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Natalie you are awesome.
Don't listen to this idiot.
Yes, go cry again. ;)
:D
I'd listen to you anyday!!!
if you were to be on American Idol you would win, :razz: .
Great Job!
-M
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
Agreed. Simon, is a major fool. ;)
We need more people like you. :oops: You've been nothing but kind to everyone I know.
*hug* Nat.
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
I'm a prick b/c I don't like your crap. Right.
You only hate simon b/c he'd tell you and anyone else who sounds like you that you suck! (The truth!)
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:D
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
Agreed. Simon, is a major fool. ;)
We need more people like you. :oops: You've been nothing but kind to everyone I know.
*hug* Nat.
That's why Simon is swimming in millions...Face it, he's honest...
and as for being a product, partially true...but they don't really sell the American Idol...they sell the show.
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:D
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Damn it, I'm BRUTALLY honest! Where's my check? :evil:
Noo~ I get modded. :?
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Damn it, I'm BRUTALLY honest! Where's my check? :evil:
Noo~ I get modded. :?
It's because you give it all awayyyyyyyyy....the easy ones don't get paid...didn't they teach you that in school!?
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double bubble...I mean post.
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
I'm a prick b/c I don't like your crap. Right.
You only hate simon b/c he'd tell you and anyone else who sounds like you that you suck! (The truth!)
you're a prick because you don't like my crap and then have to tell me i suck and sound like a dying cat. any polite person would say they just didn't like it or wouldn't say anything at all.
for the record, you're the first person who's ever told me i suck. so that's obviously not the popular opinion.
i am proud of myself and my songs and if you feel the need to mock me, you can just go fuck yourself and then feel stupid when you hear my voice all over the radio in a few years.
you can mock me and my song all you like, but truth be told, you just look like a fool.
i never did a thing to you. i'm not sure why, out of all the people here, you chose me to fuck with, but i guess i'm just lucky.
if you continue to mess with me, i'm going to the mods. plain and simple.
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Why would you "go to the mods"? He didn't threaten to kill you...it's a damn message board. He didn't come up with the "you sound like a dying cat." I did...when he asked for a comment, I gave him one.
You're right, you might make it to radio...but eh, that doesn't make you good. Maybe people like to kiss your ass, and tell you you're good...when you're not all that great. I'm sorry, I don't like it.
And how can you get mad at DM? You have commented to people, granted in a "nice way," in a rather "I know more than you ever will" kind of way...It's all over the board.
He gave his honest opinion, that's life. Not everyone is going to bow at your feet and say OMG THAT IS SO GOOD. Again, I don't really care if you make it to radio (I would say you couldn't, but who am I to say that?)...I just won't be buying your stuff...unless it was better than that stuff.
I'm sorry if you're offended.
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Wow, that's really good, and I'm not just saying that. It isn't easy to write music and lyrics. Personally, I think you have a good voice, but you could have sung it a little bit better (you could tell you were nervous, that's why.) And it's really hard to share your music with other people, so that's very cool. :D
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thanks, manda. :D
don't worry, i never cried. :lol: isn't it strange how random people you've never talked to/offended or anything decide that have to be absolute pricks? it's sad what has happened to people these days.
ps. i'd NEVER be on american idol. i'd be a product, not a person. and simon has no taste, anyway.
I'm a prick b/c I don't like your crap. Right.
You only hate simon b/c he'd tell you and anyone else who sounds like you that you suck! (The truth!)
you're a prick because you don't like my crap and then have to tell me i suck and sound like a dying cat. any polite person would say they just didn't like it or wouldn't say anything at all.
for the record, you're the first person who's ever told me i suck. so that's obviously not the popular opinion.
i am proud of myself and my songs and if you feel the need to mock me, you can just go fuck yourself and then feel stupid when you hear my voice all over the radio in a few years.
you can mock me and my song all you like, but truth be told, you just look like a fool.
i never did a thing to you. i'm not sure why, out of all the people here, you chose me to fuck with, but i guess i'm just lucky.
if you continue to mess with me, i'm going to the mods. plain and simple.
Right. I may be the first person to openly say you suck, but as with many, and as I used to, alot of people say it's good just to be kind. I won't be listening to any radio station that plays your crap. Bring on the mods if they ban so what, message boards don't rule my life and I sure as hell can still have my friends in real life regardless if I post on a message board or not.
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wow... i'm so impressed with your real life friends. :roll:
i don't care if you liked the song or not. i didn't want you to kiss my ass. you were just outright rude and i didn't appreciate it.
and as for my voice... you record something on a digital camera and upload it, then you see how great YOU sound. i have taken compliments all my life and your opinion doesn't change anything.
let me remind you that ms. carlton's demos were recorded on what sounds like a talk boy and she sounds like crap in several of the songs. and look where she is.
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are you just starting off...writing wise?
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writing music? or writing lyrics?
i've written lyrics forever, but i don't exactly have ron fair on john shanks to compose some beautiful melody to sing. i do what i can.
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i meant writing lyrics.
I'm new with the music, too.
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yeah, i've been writing for about four years now. it's really funny to look at stuff i did as a freshmen and compare it to what i write now. i almost embarrass myself with how bad i was... i have about 15 sets of lyrics that i consider worthy of becoming songs; some of them have music (written by my best friend, not me this time) but most don't.
writing music is so slow-going. it's so hard to find something that works. even after i think i have something good, i'll suddenly realize it sucks.
how's doing music working for you?
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I feel mean...*sorry about my post.*
okay, it's great...but that's what I want to do for my career, lol. I usually have to have the music done before the lyrics if I want music to it though...but the music part is easy/fun for me. I don't read/write music, I do it all by my trusty guitar...which I get a little carried away with.
Lyric wise, I have been writing for almost 5 years...and yea, the stuff I wrote then I want to throw away now...it's so o.O. But I hate most of the stuff I write, but everyone is like it's sooooo good...and I am like o.O (I am addicted to that o.O face). It can get very frustrating at times...that's when I have to stop and do something else...one of my problems is I HATE editing.
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out of the fifteen that i consider worthy, i only really like about five. so that kind of sucks. but i write all the time. sometimes i'll just sit down and write phrases i like, and then when i'm actually writing a song i'll go back and pull lines from lists i've made. it works out really well.
i just wish i had composition skills... i can play guitar and piano and read music, but i am not versed in theory at ALL. i really want to make something of myself... music is my passion. it's the only thing that gets me through the day.
and seriously, i can sing. i've been in every musical my school put on in high school. i had the lead in the last. i play talent shows and i sing in my church. i'm honestly not trying to be stuck-up; these are just the facts. sorry that my recording made me sound so bad. (this wasn't directly addressed to you, twister) :(