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Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: amberbeads on January 08, 2007, 12:08:22 pm

I found it to be rather ironic that, when I was little my mom would tell me things would be better in the morning. I lived by that until now, when I realized I'd rather be in the dark with this guy while he broke my heart, because I didn't realize it was broken til morning when I could see clearly.

My mother used to tell me
Things look better in the morning
The sunshine keeps your trouble from
Coming on without a warning
A kiss on the forehead
I'm sent off to bed
I'd try to forget the monsters in my head

But the night will hide my secrets
My mother, she was wrong
In the dark I cannot see the hurt
That's plagued me for so long
I'll never fear the dark again
It hides me from my sin

You're striking in the morning
More than any other hour
The sun shines on your features
And radiates with power
A kiss on the forehead
I'm sent from your bed
I try to forget it's not just in my head

But the night will hide your secrets
The sunshine reads you wrong
In the dark I cannot speak the truth
That's plagued me for so long
I'll never fear the dark again
It hides me from your sin

Star light, star bright
There are no stars tonight
I wish I may, I wish I might
Hide my demons from the light
Don't try and read me
There's not even a chance
You'd ever know my circumstance
I lie with you in bed and know
You'll never see what black doesn't show

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: MeganJane on January 08, 2007, 04:48:25 pm

That's REALLY great! I'd LOVE to hear it as a finished song... any plans for that?
You're really talented  :D

My favourite lines are:

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I'll never fear the dark again
It hides me from your sin

and

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Star light, star bright
There are no stars tonight
I wish I may, I wish I might
Hide my demons from the light

My favourite style of writing is that which uses a lot of dark metaphors and imagery. That's how I like to write. I'd really appreciate it if you could take the time to listen to my demos... there's just two at the moment
the link is: www.myspace.com/meganjanefazakerley
If you do, please let me know what you think!

anyway, not meaning to promote myself; I just think it's good for us musicians/songwriters etc. to support each other  :D

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: me and my piano---tim on January 08, 2007, 10:33:05 pm

ditto!

this really is good.  I especially love how you developed the 3rd stanza from the 1st. Good job!

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: amberbeads on January 09, 2007, 06:30:41 am

thanks, you guys  :D yes, it actually already has music, but i have no means of recording it... sorry!!! when i figure that out someday i'll have about fifty songs to upload lol.
megan i'll definitely check your stuff out. i've seen you mention it in a couple of threads, i've actually been meaning to visit your website but i've just been lazy  :oops:

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: ordinaryday6 on January 09, 2007, 08:42:47 am

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: bumblebee429 on January 09, 2007, 06:34:22 pm

that's an awesome piece!
can't say much more than well done.

is there any chance we can hear it with music?

xox sarah

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: MeganJane on January 10, 2007, 02:52:23 am

Quote from: "ordinaryday6"

Quote from: "MeganJane"

That's REALLY great! I'd LOVE to hear it as a finished song... any plans for that?

it's got music and it sounds GREAT. i heard it yesterday. :D

love it, nat. <3

You're lucky.  :)

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: itsthefiveofus on July 02, 2007, 11:26:38 pm

o.m.g.

this is just so deep. I love it. tres bien! very good!

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: tylor2000 on July 02, 2007, 11:48:30 pm

I was going to say the same thing.  Those are really great words.

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: Rainy night on July 03, 2007, 06:37:35 am

It's really good... Really deep indeed... I like this a lot too.
You're really talented  :razz:

Title: My Mother, She Was Wrong
Post by: amberbeads on July 04, 2007, 11:29:41 am

thank you guys very much  :D