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Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 25, 2003, 11:51:33 am: I woke up to the sun today
Finding the glow of its orange rays
As it streamed across the room this morn
And touched me on my face

I saw a picture painted gold
As the room it lit up from outside
When the beauty of it stuck me
And washed over me like the tide

Portrait of perfection
Great in every way
I wonder if somehow
This is God's way to start my day
So beautifully entrancing
And filled with everything

The colors swirled and danced about
In a room so right and small
My breath was caught inside my throat
As I stood gazing from the hall

Tears swelled in my eyes as I looked about
At a thousand words only I knew
Its then that I realized something missing so vital...
It was me and you

But throughout all of its beauty
Wrapped up in all its shine
Was the grand thought of how someday
This all will be yours and mine

Portrait of perfection
Great in everyway
I wonder if someway
This is God's way to start my day
So beautifully entrancing
And filled with everything

Feed back please. Whaddya think of it????

POST IF YOUR READ IT PLEASE!?? hahaha
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Jophess on August 25, 2003, 12:19:50 pm: Is there a song to this? I love Mallory's song(s)!
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Gina on August 25, 2003, 12:33:34 pm: Of course i love it, as always! I seriously think you're so talented. Its reaallly good though- yeah is it gonna be a song?!
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 25, 2003, 01:03:05 pm: Possibly... I've been tossing around some notes here and there, but nothing I've started has struck me as "something"... well okay. One thing did. But for me, I sit and play the same thing over and over and over seeing if and where it can fit... Well my mom lost it and screamed at me. "SHUT UP! STOP IT ALREADY!"... Now, I think it sounds bad because she trashed my efforts. .... Oh well. I'm still trying stuff... Those last two I wrote don't seem to fit much to anything... Hopefully this will. ;)
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 25, 2003, 01:04:53 pm: Oh and Joey... (do you prefer Joseph??)... well anyhow, I love your pm and I've only done two songs on the piano as you can see though... I'm trying to increase that because I find much fun in it... Anyways... I can't really reply to your PM right now, but when I get a chance to I will right away...

(Already got told to get off the net in class... ahhh)

hahaha lol
Title: Re: Portrait of Perfection
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 25, 2003, 01:07:37 pm: Quote from: "Ms.Redd"

POST IF YOUR READ IT PLEASE!??

Omg, haha ... I just realized this typo... I *thought* sumthin' looked funky.

LOL!
Title: nice
Post by: loginname101 on August 25, 2003, 01:16:32 pm: That was really good. It made me smile. Hey do we really need to let ya know what we think? I mean everything that you do is great. :) Thanks for making me smile
Title: .....
Post by: loginname101 on August 25, 2003, 01:25:56 pm: Where do ya think of all of this?? You are really smart and talented ya know that? Well keep doing what you are doing because you are making a lot of people happy. Well at least me so dont stop:).
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Gina on August 25, 2003, 01:38:23 pm: :D well i cant wait to hear more songs! hopefully you find somethin that fits. And that sucks about you're mom trashing it! I'm sure it sounded great!
Title: :)
Post by: loginname101 on August 25, 2003, 01:58:16 pm: You are great :D
Title: Re: :)
Post by: Gina on August 25, 2003, 02:11:42 pm: Quote from: "loginname101"
You are great :D

mal? yes of course she is!
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 30, 2003, 06:27:12 am: woohooey! *starts singing to the Na-nah tune* I got the music-I got the music!!! YES!

I'ma post it in a second. I hadda change the lyrics and add a little bit to it to make it work, but I got it... Yippeee!!!

hum de dum... okay hang on... I'ma make a threa... well no. It might get locked and I don't wanna get people pissed at me. BUT I GOT IT!!

Okay... hang on.
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 30, 2003, 06:58:13 am: http://www.angelfire.lycos.com/oh5/mallory0/portrait.wav

THERE it IS! :D!!

Hope you like it, its more quiet, slow, and soft. Not the normal for the past couple ones I've done. ;)

Tell me whatcha think...
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 30, 2003, 08:10:24 am: hmm... uhm.... did that work?
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Gently realistic on August 30, 2003, 10:03:07 am: You know I will listen if I finally can.... I promised, and will :)
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 30, 2003, 11:42:58 am: okie dokie!
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Jophess on August 30, 2003, 03:21:16 pm: Hehe, I looked at your web site! Yes, I am listening to it AGAIN! I am now listening to "Portrait of Perfection" Talking the verses? Mal, are you sure?

OMG, Portrait of Perfextion is the shizzles! I love the piano, but I wouldn't talk the verses. But you talk it the best! Mal has entered another great creation.
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 30, 2003, 04:09:10 pm: Talking the verses... I know. But I was having an uber hard time getting it to fit if I sang it. I've still tried it but I never end up at the end of the verse its more like the middle of the third line.

Oh well. ;)
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Gina on August 31, 2003, 10:06:00 am: it is different than the rest, but i really like it a lot. its really pretty :D
Title: Portrait of Perfection(audio now included)
Post by: Ms.Redd on August 31, 2003, 01:44:43 pm: Glad you liked it. Thanks for downloading it!

:D