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Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 18, 2004, 05:55:44 am

ok this is a song i wrote the other day, its not very gd, but feedback wud be nice, good or bad :)

Too far:

I thought that you were the one for me
But you just let me down
I thought that you were all i need
But where are you now?

You've taken this way too far
It's no use saying your sorry
You've taken this way too far
And there's no turning back

I lay awake and i cry thinking about
The things you used to say
The way you used to smile and i
Felt like you would never go away

You've taken this way too far
It's no use saying you love me
You've taken this way too far
And i don't want you back

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i think i mite add like a bridge to it and something to the end, but oh well.

Lisa xxx

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 18, 2004, 05:57:35 am

Veeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeery good...don't think it's missing a bridge, but you could try sticking one in there *shrug*

so sorry about the cause hun *hugs*

Title: "Too far"
Post by: aleera84 on February 18, 2004, 05:59:06 am

Thats really good Lisa, cant wait to read your other ones  :D

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 18, 2004, 06:03:16 am

aww thanku sweeties!!! nah i didnt think it needed much more either tia, thats y i posted it. *hugs for both of u!*  :D

Lisa xxx

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 18, 2004, 06:04:51 am

Haha, okies :)

And you're welcome! *hug*

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Post by: c'estlavie on February 18, 2004, 06:15:39 am

hehe *grins*

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Post by: Tia on February 18, 2004, 06:16:13 am

*pets* :-P :D  :wink:

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 18, 2004, 06:19:39 am

hehe bless

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Post by: Tia on February 18, 2004, 06:20:36 am

*hug*

It's so good to talk to you again, girly!! :D

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 18, 2004, 06:22:30 am

u too sweetie. its been a long time

take care

Lisa xxx

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Post by: rosieposy87 on February 18, 2004, 08:34:00 am

Oh my darling, i really hope you're feeling better and that writing that helped a bit. I really like it, it seems quite catchy- even though i errmm haven't heard the actual tune. I think a bridge would be good. Ooh and you should name is 'Troll', genius at work here i tell you. Bwhahaha

Title: "Too far"
Post by: vanessafan18 on February 18, 2004, 10:51:17 am

Awww Lisa that's amazing sweety I love it, and I love you!!! I hope you're okay! You gotta let me hear the whole tune when u have done, you're are just so talented!  :D

*huge hugs for my lisa* Mwah!

Georgie xoxoxox

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 19, 2004, 10:16:15 am

awww thanku guys. haha "troll", gd thinkin rosie :)

and georgie, i have the guitar music on my comp, so u can hear that, but it hasnt got the lyrics over the top. my mic wasnt gd enuf to pick up both. lol

and I LOVE YOU TOO!!!!

*hug huges for my fave ppl*

*mwah*

Lisa xxx

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 19, 2004, 10:23:38 am

Quote from: "c'estlavie"

i have the guitar music on my comp

Oooooooooooooooooooooooh!! *wants to hear it* :)

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 19, 2004, 10:37:57 am

hehe it only had enuf room to record the first verse and chorus so far, i'll record the rest at a later time. if u come on msn i can give it to u. hehe *hints*

Lisa xxx

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Alecs on February 21, 2004, 12:20:45 am

"I lay awake and i cry thinking about
The things you used to say
The way you used to smile and i
Felt like you would never go away"

That part is "Golden". :wink:

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 21, 2004, 07:17:25 am

haha, its completely shite. lol

but oh well.

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 21, 2004, 08:05:37 am

Quote from: "c'estlavie"

its completely shite

*spanks* :wink:

The guitar playing is awesome!! 8O

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 21, 2004, 09:09:14 am

ouch!

its not even close to awesome!  :oops:  :?

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 21, 2004, 10:17:13 am

Oh do stop being so damn modest!!

 :wink:

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Post by: c'estlavie on February 21, 2004, 11:21:50 am

its not modest tia!! its on honest, lol

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Post by: Tia on February 21, 2004, 11:35:54 am

:roll:

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Post by: c'estlavie on February 23, 2004, 11:21:05 am

lmfao!!

dont pull that face at me missy!

:)

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Post by: vanessafan18 on February 23, 2004, 01:20:01 pm

Aww honey, you really are too modest, we just adore your talents!  :D

xox

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Post by: Tia on February 23, 2004, 01:50:41 pm

Quote from: "c'estlavie"

lmfao!!

dont pull that face at me missy!

:)

 :roll:


 :wink:

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 24, 2004, 10:14:51 am

lmao, oh yes the talent of being able to bend my fingers into weird shapes. lol i can actually do that, its freaky

tia!!! damn u and that face

haha

Title: "Too far"
Post by: Tia on February 24, 2004, 11:27:03 am

Hehe... :roll:

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Post by: c'estlavie on February 24, 2004, 11:34:51 am

lol :-)

such great talent

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Post by: Tia on February 24, 2004, 11:54:56 am

I can do a maxican wave with my eyebrows too! Wanna see?  :D :-P :wink:

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 25, 2004, 01:07:21 pm

lmao, now thats freaky!!

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Post by: Tia on February 27, 2004, 04:05:00 am

Haha *wiggles eyebrows*

Title: "Too far"
Post by: c'estlavie on February 27, 2004, 10:13:34 am

LMAO!!! nice!  :wink: