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just something I wrote....
« on: January 28, 2008, 08:35:01 am »
K this isnt a song...its not a poem either...its just thoughts and feelings I wrote...it could be used as like a small skit or something :razz: :lol:


Before you leave, I need to tell u something....
ure so cute and sweet and nice....
and i fell for u the moment we started chatting at the end of last year...
Im sorry, but i cant help what i feel
Ive tried to get over u, but i only fall harder
and now u have a girlfriend and i want to be happy for u...
I am happy for u...atleast i try to be
I cant help but imagine me in her place
i know u think of me as ur little sister
but i just wanted to let u know how i feel
cause i cant help but have a tiny spark of hope that u just might give me a chance one day
u dont feel the same way and i know that...no need to be sorry
just know that u will always be special to me and i will always remember u no matter what
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just something I wrote....
« Reply #1 on: January 28, 2008, 10:46:34 pm »
Nice... :)
Is this writting based on your personal life?
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just something I wrote....
« Reply #2 on: January 30, 2008, 05:58:40 am »
Quote from: "musician"
Nice... :)
Is this writting based on your personal life?


sadly...yes!   :oops:  :oops:   :wink:  :)
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just something I wrote....
« Reply #3 on: January 31, 2008, 01:10:38 am »
k heres something else i wrote....

I know he's wonderful
and i wanna let u know that ure so lucky to have him
just be good with him
cause he deserves the best...
plz give him ur best
im sure ure really nice and u two probably are the best for eachother
and im sorry for anything ive done to get between u and him
i never meant to go behind ur back and dance with him that night
it was just my emotions on high
plz forgive me for anything i said
i was just being selfish and unfair
as i look back i cant remember exactly why i wanted him to be with me
i just know i was desperate and in love
this is my appology so plz take me seriously
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« Reply #4 on: February 02, 2008, 09:33:34 pm »
So I imagine this...She's probably your best friend, you two love the same guy, but you just gave him up for her (simply because you're such a hero or heroin :) ) . You've done somethin that made you felt uneasy on your friend so you want to ask 4 forgiveness...
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just something I wrote....
« Reply #5 on: February 03, 2008, 02:17:38 am »
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So I imagine this...She's probably your best friend, you two love the same guy, but you just gave him up for her (simply because you're such a hero or heroin :) ) . You've done somethin that made you felt uneasy on your friend so you want to ask 4 forgiveness...


LOL
gd interpretation! :)
But I actually hate the girl...even before she became his gf
she is like so snobby and mean to me and my friends...
but now im trying to be nice to her so he will be happy...
:D

I AM A HEROIN! YAY ME! :razz: :lol: LOL
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Re: just something I wrote....
« Reply #6 on: February 03, 2008, 03:09:05 pm »
Quote from: "VanessaCarltonMania"
K this isnt a song...its not a poem either...its just thoughts and feelings I wrote...it could be used as like a small skit or something :razz: :lol:


Before you leave, I need to tell u something....
ure so cute and sweet and nice....
and i fell for u the moment we started chatting at the end of last year...
Im sorry, but i cant help what i feel
Ive tried to get over u, but i only fall harder
and now u have a girlfriend and i want to be happy for u...
I am happy for u...atleast i try to be
I cant help but imagine me in her place
i know u think of me as ur little sister
but i just wanted to let u know how i feel
cause i cant help but have a tiny spark of hope that u just might give me a chance one day
u dont feel the same way and i know that...no need to be sorry
just know that u will always be special to me and i will always remember u no matter what


I remember you talking about this situation. I like this line the best
"I cant help but imagine me in her place"
there is this guy I like and he does not had a significant other but any time I see him with someone I feel that same feeling.

Current takes me out, what will be, will be. Floating on the sea, stars are watching me.

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just something I wrote....
« Reply #7 on: February 03, 2008, 03:10:27 pm »
I enjoyed reading your work! =]

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just something I wrote....
« Reply #8 on: February 05, 2008, 10:11:35 am »
thanks! :)
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