this is an old poem i wrote after a bad relationship that ended a few years ago. i was really young, but, of course, i thought i knew everything. so i wrote it. however, it gets pretty blunt. critique and questions would be appreciated. have at it!
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you flashed a grin as you walked pst
so i got in line fir a ticket on your roller coaster ride.
slip a hand around her waist and into my pants
put your gift in a box and ship it to "no pride".
i'll take a pill and it'll be alright
then just put on a smile
since we're all clowns in a circus,
but my name is denial
hello to you and shake a hand, do a little dance
then flash that grin of yours and put me back in your trance.
it's playing for keeps and no refunds
so take your wins and move along.
nothing to see.
have a good day-because you don't belong
so buy your one way ticket and hop on
we're going for a joy ride
back to ol' nightmare lane
so shut the door and tie that blindfold tight
then give me my sanity in little doses to make me think im sane.
while in real life im in a straight jacket in my enclosed cell.
i give up.
i've already lost.
so take your new win and grin
cause this expired tickets got too much a high cost
so a new whore can have a ride on your roller coaster high
i dont really think it conveys the message i wanted it to when i wrote it, but it compares what i believed at the time to what was really going on.
i've up for feeback: good? bad?
i can also explain because its a pain to understand. i just felt like sharing it since im looking back at old english projects. =]
peace out & thanks.
-gina
