The Voice Within Me

[iluvvanessa]

it has song potential in my opinion....ur a great writer, i might change the word hate, its a strong word, just saying. it's great tho....id love to see more of your poetry if you have some it was really good

[VanessaCarltonMania]

I remember I wrote a song a long time ago but I didn't really like it, but most of ppl thought it was quite good to be my first one, I had tons of good ideas for them, but I just gave up! Don't do the same and keep trying!

mmhmm well everyone seems to think that its a song...its a poem
than tyler200 said that there was no rhyme to it, I never said it had rhyme, I did not want rhyme, not every poem had to rhyme.

its great! and btw...poetry doesnt have to rhyme!

great job, love it so much! and im glad it shows feelings!