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« on: October 14, 2007, 06:45:50 pm »
i'd say just about everyone can relate to this.  i felt nostalgic, but in a bad and longing way today and came up with this.



The dull throb
Of some preexisting life
Born inside my memories
Its presence fills me up, drains me
I give nothing back

The absence
Of a hand once held
With fondest memories
Eyes are paths for dreams to take
That gave nothing back

In these times
We hope to forget
In these times
We fear the regret

The still life
Still exists with vivacity
Unceasing so passionately
Fruitless desires for all that's insatiable
Will give nothing back

In these times
What's weak stands strong
In these times
Our inability to move along

With the sweetest submission
I pay no heed to what was ours
Easier to glance the other way
I'll succumb to my frailty
All vanishes in the morning's
revealing light
But I can't blame my mentality

The letdown
Always reminds me where I am
I cannot stand in yesterday
Yearning for another taste because
I'll get nothing back

In these times
We want more than closure
In these times
We wish that it was never over

In these times
We cling to what is lost
In these times
We deny all these thoughts.
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« Reply #1 on: October 17, 2007, 12:38:06 pm »
Aw, come on!
I know at least one of you wants to tell me it sucks :P
But really, I'm considering working this into a song, so I'd like some feedback...please & thanks :)
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« Reply #2 on: October 17, 2007, 12:46:53 pm »
wow this is beautiful. you have pure talent...i see the next Vanessa LOL
this really is awesome. turn it into a song!!
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« Reply #3 on: December 20, 2007, 11:00:36 pm »
its really good!!!!
u should really turn it into a song!!!! piano and everything!!! :D:D
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