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maag

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My first song
« on: April 05, 2008, 03:28:02 am »
Hi. I've just written my first song ever! It could have a lot of mistakes, so feel free to correct them. And also, tell me what you think about the lyrics. The music isn't still composed.

Wake up, feel the ground
Prepare for a new day
Wood is cold, so your heart
Get ready to pain

CHORUS:
Don't feel like not wanting to live
Life can shine on you, just look
The sun burns your eyes as you
Leave all the grieves in the dark

Walk on, feel the ground
Can you see the world behind?
Today no-one can stop you
Your mind won't meet Doubt.

CHORUS

Lie down, feel the moist
Of your past troubles
As soon as you push them aside
Sun will find you on your own


That's it. Bye!

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My first song
« Reply #1 on: April 05, 2008, 03:34:35 am »
The meaning is very nice!
and i like how u worded it!
Great job! :D
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« Reply #2 on: April 06, 2008, 10:20:08 pm »
wow, those are really pretty lyrics :)