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MyLifeIsLikeATM · « **on:** January 19, 2004, 12:38:05 pm »

What i like about this poem is that its one of the rare ones i write that is completly about me and someone. (its not just figurative)

The things I want to tell you
The words I cannot say
The life that’s overwhelming
The love I gave away

The way you felt
The tears I cried
The lips God made
The kisses you gave

The warmth of my hand
The shaking of you touch
The stars above
The power of love

The streets and the trees
The begging of “please”
The pain we undergo
The feeling we can’t yet know

The questions of you
The wondering of what’s next
The soul of my body
The warmth of you chest

The glisten in my eyes
The way you hid my cries
The stars above
The power of love

The losing you
The not knowing why
The letting go
The wanting to know

The crease of the past
The struggling to go back
The silence between
The end of our scene

The catching up in my life
The not knowing what’s right
The stars above
The power of love

Scotty · « **Reply #1 on:** January 19, 2004, 12:45:50 pm »

title "the..."

c'estlavie · « **Reply #2 on:** January 19, 2004, 12:47:14 pm »

wow, thats really cool. i wish i could rite poems as well as u, but i guess practice makes perfect. i will get there. lol

its brill!

Love ya

Lisa xxx

MyLifeIsLikeATM · « **Reply #3 on:** January 20, 2004, 06:38:44 pm »

thank you

and yes, just keep writing and u will improve!

i still dont have a title...lol

Scotty · « **Reply #4 on:** January 20, 2004, 07:37:16 pm »

Quote from: "MyLifeIsLikeATM"

thank you

and yes, just keep writing and u will improve!

i still dont have a title...lol

Quote from: "Scotty"

title "the..."

MyLifeIsLikeATM · « **Reply #5 on:** January 20, 2004, 09:34:08 pm »

i think its a realitive title..but i feel it takes away from the meaning of the poem. but thanks for the suggestion

Tia · « **Reply #6 on:** January 22, 2004, 01:10:49 am »

That's really amazing...

c'estlavie · « **Reply #7 on:** January 24, 2004, 02:07:16 pm »

yup yup, i will keep trying to think of a title for u

Lisa xxx

vanessafan18 · « **Reply #8 on:** January 24, 2004, 02:25:21 pm »

That was so amazing, you have such a great talent. I wish I could right like that!

xoxox

c'estlavie · « **Reply #9 on:** January 24, 2004, 02:27:56 pm »

hey georgie!!

ur not the only one, as i sed before

hope ur well, love ya sweetie!

Lisa xxx

MyLifeIsLikeATM · « **Reply #10 on:** January 25, 2004, 09:17:14 pm »

Quote from: "Tia"

That's really amazing...

Quote from: "vanessafan18"

That was so amazing, you have such a great talent. I wish I could right like that!

xoxox

thanks, i really appreciate. it makes me feel better knowing other ppl appreciate my work

Tia · « **Reply #11 on:** January 26, 2004, 09:32:17 am »

Quote from: "MyLifeIsLikeATM"

Quote from: "Tia"
That's really amazing...

Quote from: "vanessafan18"
That was so amazing, you have such a great talent. I wish I could right like that!

xoxox

thanks, i really appreciate. it makes me feel better knowing other ppl appreciate my work

Awww...you're welcome! *hug*

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