Something I wrote during SAT prep today lol

[All I Ask2003]

this is the first thing i've ever written without stopping to think, I'm really happy with it because, whether or not it makes sense to anyone else here, it really paints a picture of what I'm making of life right now in general.

I really don't care if you don't like it, if you wanna say it sucks go ahead.  I will accept anything anyone has to say, though.







But you don't ever know
The intensity
The insanity
Sweeps over me
In a canopy of dreariness
Weary and pissed off

Is it so perverse?
Is it really that bad?
In the grand scheme
What does it matter anyway?

But you always know
You never would
Top my list
Invariably
Can't we skip all the damn details?
You can't articulate

Is it so perverse?
Is it really that bad?
In the grand scheme
What does it matter anyway?

We move across land
Drown in oceans
of our own deepest fears
Words form in the shape
of my hesitence
I can't articulate
I can't, I can't

Is it so perverse?
Is it really that bad?
In the grand scheme
What does it matter anyway?

What happens outside the window
is none of our concern
You smile at me so lovely
I swear
You're melting glaciers with that stare
Pick up falling leaves
and put them in my hair

Just stop
I can't.

[Suicidalboobs]

You're right, I have no idea what that means, but I like it. Especially the ending stanzas. (Melt a glacier with that stare... leaves in my hair) it's good!

[soupdujour]

Hm, it's not bad. I guess. What's it about?  

[NoelleNC]

^  :? sort of rude with the "I guess."

I like it =) It sounds to me like you could make it a song. But I'm not sure if you're a musical person! I like the end the best too.

The only thing I might change if I were you, if you are keeping it as a poem (it might work in a song though), is the "pissed off" line- just because it breaks away from the abstract poetic aspect the rest gives off. Musically that could sound neat though.

And I was wondering what was so perverse =P