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Five Are Few
« on: November 15, 2007, 09:42:36 am »
Five are few
My skies are blue
The days I spent with you
Five are few
The streets are new
The places I walked through

Home at night to where you are
Suddenly, I see
That perfect, sunny, rosy skies
Are always cloudy in your eyes

There's always a change
From what you say
To what your fingers do
And touch me in a simple way
That sends your words askew
If I could arrange
For you to say
The words that are your truth
And come to light
And carry through
We'd finally make this right

Five are few
Your words renew
The troubles we talked through
Five are few
And I re-captured you
Your scabs torn up anew

Home at night, alone with you
Suddenly, I see
That fear, in all its mystery
Has stolen you from me

There's always a change
From what you say
To what your fingers do
And touch me in a simple way
That sends your words askew
If I could arrange
For you to say
The words that are your truth
And come to light
And carry through
We'd finally make this right

I know there's a change
When you're holding me
And when your bed is empty
The droplets we cried in pure tragedy
Show us what is missing
And you're so alone
You know when I'm gone
You're back to misery
Stop your burning mind
The answer you're to find
Only lies in me
*natalie*



at least i can say
i was not afraid
i loved you all the way
i'd pick the fool any day.

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« Reply #1 on: November 17, 2007, 12:20:04 pm »
"There's always a change
From what you say
To what your fingers do"

beautiful.

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« Reply #2 on: November 17, 2007, 01:56:50 pm »
thank you :)
*natalie*



at least i can say
i was not afraid
i loved you all the way
i'd pick the fool any day.

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« Reply #3 on: December 19, 2007, 07:31:37 am »
this is beautiful!! keep up the great work!!!! :D
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« Reply #4 on: December 21, 2007, 05:48:10 pm »
this is really good.

by the way, i like your sig. that's one of my favorite pictures.

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« Reply #5 on: December 21, 2007, 07:10:18 pm »
8O

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« Reply #6 on: December 21, 2007, 08:32:00 pm »
I really like it!  8O  its pretty good! 10/10

Current takes me out, what will be, will be. Floating on the sea, stars are watching me.

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« Reply #7 on: December 21, 2007, 09:22:26 pm »
Very nice. Very, very nice.
I really like it, actually.

I wish more people would comment on the song I made. (Watch Her)
I really want some feedback so I can post some more stuff.

But I'm a complainer. I really like your stuff.
That's what she said.

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« Reply #8 on: January 22, 2008, 01:34:54 pm »
i like it nat... i thought you said you hadn't written anything? silly.. lol.
Samuel
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« Reply #9 on: January 23, 2008, 12:31:06 pm »
my bad, i keep forgetting i wrote this one.
*natalie*



at least i can say
i was not afraid
i loved you all the way
i'd pick the fool any day.