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« on: December 05, 2007, 06:22:04 pm »
Here's a song that I wrote that I am proud of the lyrics and piano arrangement I have almost completed.

Watch Her
Verse 1:
She hides her emotions so it doesn't hurt
For the ones around her weren't what it's worth
She puts her smiles on in vain
It means nothing, yet she carries it through the day
The on in whom she puts her love and grace
Shrugs her off, slams the door in her face
Chorus:
And she just needs a place to give up and cry
She just needs arms to hold her
To hold her through her fear
If it doesn't last forever
You're her only hope, and
She loves you more than you would know
And you just stand back, and
First Chorus Ending
Watch her fall to her knees
Verse 2:
She watches you from a distand place
So it all doesn't blow up in her face
She brings her laughs up in vain
Even though her day is bleak and grey
Without your love she just can't go on
**Repeat Piano Bars of First Stanza**
Chorus Repeat
Second Chorus Ending:
Watch her fall to pieces
Bridge:
I place my words carefully
I take my steps gracefully
Every now and then I fall in the dirt
Everyday it will always hurt
If only life could give back that love
Though this isn't rock bottom
Chorus Repeat
Third Chorus Ending
Watch her fall to nothing

Watch her fall into your arms.

That's my song. Definately not the first song I wrote. Haha, if you read the first song I wrote, you would be laughing your head off because I was nine when I wrote my first song. I recorded it on a tape recorder and everything. I laugh everytime I listen to the recording.

Back on the subject...
To describe my songs that I've written so far, I think most of them are like, darker songs with a small ray of hope written into them. So if you like that kind of poetry, then you might actually like my creations. :D
If I get good feedback on this one, I'll post some other songs I've written.
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« Reply #1 on: December 19, 2007, 07:11:20 am »
Holy crap!!!!!! This is awesome!!!!!
You're so talented!!!!
I think that every sad song goes with my life...but this one beats all the rest...
If my life needed a theme song...this would definitely be it!!!!

YAY U!
Keep up the gd work! :D
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« Reply #2 on: December 19, 2007, 07:16:22 pm »
Wow, thanks so much! I've finished the piano music to it, and I`m really proud of it. I Really appreciate the feedback!
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« Reply #3 on: December 21, 2007, 09:46:12 pm »
I love it. 8-) I wish I could write something that long and like keep focus the whole time!

Current takes me out, what will be, will be. Floating on the sea, stars are watching me.

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« Reply #4 on: December 22, 2007, 12:39:03 pm »
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I love it. 8-) I wish I could write something that long and like keep focus the whole time!

 Thanks! I should post another one of my songs that I'm proud of. Maybe after I'm done my saturday cleaning.
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« Reply #5 on: December 23, 2007, 05:09:39 am »
you are good ! I like it.
everytime I try to write something it's too short.
or lame. xD
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« Reply #6 on: December 23, 2007, 09:32:59 am »
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I love it. 8-) I wish I could write something that long and like keep focus the whole time!

 Thanks! I should post another one of my songs that I'm proud of. Maybe after I'm done my saturday cleaning.


no problem, can't wait to see it =]. and I hate Saturday Cleaning....

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« Reply #7 on: January 23, 2008, 07:28:33 am »
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Wow, thanks so much! I've finished the piano music to it, and I`m really proud of it. I Really appreciate the feedback!


Can u post it on youtube or something plz?? :D
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« Reply #8 on: January 23, 2008, 08:22:42 pm »
Yeah, I'll try, but I'll have to have some free time and get my sister to record it.
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« Reply #9 on: January 24, 2008, 12:21:15 am »
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Yeah, I'll try, but I'll have to have some free time and get my sister to record it.


kk thanks!!! :D:D
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