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pisceanprincessa

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my latest rant... in poetic form
« on: April 20, 2003, 08:21:00 pm »
Hands

What would it take to make my hands like hers
The power she wields over him
His world turns over
He’s putty in her hands
 
She doesn’t know the strength she has
She’s innocent to the love he feels
He’s not the same boy he once was
The girl with the song makes his mind reel
 
He wants to feel her hands on his skin
He dreams of how the heat would feel
Soft, hard, smooth, calloused
Her knowing hands knowing him all over
 
My hands are not as strong as hers
My hands have no power over him
I long to touch and feel his body
To make him wise to the love I feel
 
You will see her make her music
Feel her hands, and then her lips
Yet you are unaware of the love she feels
Unknowingly the subject of her song
 
Will it ever be my turn
Someone’s hands wanting me
Oblivious to the love felt
Real emotions unmasked

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my latest rant... in poetic form
« Reply #1 on: April 20, 2003, 08:23:57 pm »
wow! i like it, good job

pisceanprincessa

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thank you!
« Reply #2 on: April 20, 2003, 08:26:29 pm »
I was a little worried too much feeling was showing through...
Silly, I know... Considering artistic stuff isn;t normally very good unless there is plenty of reality behind it.
It was one of those heat of the moment rantings that took shape befoe I even knew what was going on...
*lol*

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« Reply #3 on: April 20, 2003, 08:51:09 pm »
hmmm it really works! You should look into publishing...have you written anything else?

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« Reply #4 on: April 21, 2003, 04:50:00 am »
I like that alot

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