Road Love

[Ms.Redd]

Quiet thoughts only we think
Race through our heads at different moments
Not speaking but sharing the same ones
Of times gone and past
Dreaming of them and reliving them
All alone and only with you
Then all alone again with only a grin
And a frown.
You are an image of my imagination
Once there and now gone
And a love I'll have to wait for
After a red light finally
Turns green

[Logikal X]

*holds up a card that says 8.6* hehe

its pretty good, i like the metaphor at the end...I would say to add more imagery to the emotional descriptions.  hope you like my advice :mrgreen:

[Ms.Redd]

*always likes Pete's advice*

...

*jumps around in silly dance parading her 8.6 card*

haha  

:mrgreeeeeeeeeen: :mrgreen:

haha

[Logikal X]

lol, you are silly


*holds up a 10 for the show you just put on*  :razz:


:mryelloooooooooooowwww:  

[Alecs]

"And a love I'll have to wait for
After a red light finally
Turns green"

Totally smooth....

2 thumbs up from Alecs and Spreadhead
 :wink:

[Ms.Redd]

2 thumbs up from Alecs and Spreadhead
 :wink:

erhm.... Excuse me but, uh, Alecs? ... "Spreadhead"???

hahahaha

[Jophess]

Wow, that's beautiful. I like it. *holds up card with 8.2*

If there's one thing, you could work on the flow.