---a question about the lyrics thread

[kaysha]

Vanessa Carlton - The One w/ changes

Holiday, and I come home
Out to see this boy I know
I can't wait for us to be alone

Flippin' through the radio
We sing along to the indie show
The songs they play mean more than I can say

And the tape I made you
Hope you think of me when it plays through
I'm kind of sad now that it's done

You think my time to free (what??)
In all the ways you say to me
"Sweet virgin dove lets wait and see"

But you're always a golden boy
And I'm the girl that you enjoy
My parents say "Isn't he a gifted son?"

Time is always passing by
And still I have to wonder why
You can't come and tell me I'm the one

Summer goes and we have grown
We have our friends, live on our own
Still, I'm not the girl you wanted me to be

See gravity and bend the time (what??)
Funny how you always liked your mind
But this whole thing is crushing me

Well you're always a golden boy
In this girl's heart that you destroy
You smile at me and then you have your fun

Time is always passing by
Still I give you another try
and hope that you will see
that i'm the one

You say you're scared
To get to close
Come let's see how it goes
I see him now, at the show
7th in the 7th row

And now you look at me
And see what i've known for so long
It's sad that you can be
So lovely, yet so wrong

Came to say, that i've moved
I see your face, you don't approve
Guess you could say that I'm already gone

Well you'll always be a golden boy
I'm the summer girl that you enjoy
Some melodys are best left un--

I feel the time pass away
But in my songs you'll aways stay
Don't need for you to tell me i'm the one
Oh, no, no, don't need for you to tell me
I'm the one
You'll never know that I was
The one


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there are two parts where i have a "what???" that just doesn't make sense to me but she is saying something close to that.

[kaysha]

Put Your Hands On Me w/ changes

I first saw you at the video exchange
I know my heart and it wont ever change
This temp work would be alright if you call me
You call me

I lie awake at night for you, and I pray
we crossed the deepest ocean
to go across the sea
and if you dont believe me
just put your hands on me

and all the constellations shine down on you and me
and if you dont believe me
just put your hands on me, oh no

The sun will radiate with you
we've barely met
and still i cross the street to your door
we crossed the deepest oceans
to go across the sea
and if you dont believe me
just put your hands on me
and all the constellations shine down on you and me
and if you dont believe me
just put your hands on me

some day when the stories are told
the devils of love like this
when our descendents are all growing old
i thought that you should be singing
na na na na na na na na na

we climbed the Tibetan mountains
where we could barely breathe
I see the Dalai Lama
I feel him touching me
and all the constellations shine down on you and me
and if you dont believe me
just put your hands on me
na na na na na, no
Your hands on me
na na na na na na, no
I first saw you at the video exchange

[kaysha]

This Time

It's 4 AM, and I'm wide awake
Waiting for my thoughts to fade
And a flickering of all of my mistakes

And as the light starts creeping in
I slowly feel the day i'm missing
But I wouldn't even know where to begin

And do i push too hard, I fall too fast
The moment never seems to last
And will I stop for long enough to know
That everybody burns
And when it starts to hurt
I cry
I feel it in my veins
I just can't walk away
This time

Your words single? in my head
Weight so heavy on my chest
And I'm crushed by your expectation

And only wanna do some good
But darlin' oh, if I could
And I just wanna feel the days I'm in

And do I push too hard, not hard enough
And can I keep my big mouth shut
And do you lead the life that we should
Cause everybody burns
And when it starts to hurt
I cry
I feel it in my veins
I just can't walk away
This time

And did i say too much again
I'm just a girl in a panic
And if i tell you my truth, well am I getting through?
And it just seems i started(? sound like shorted ?) fast
and who am i to pretend?
And this is more than I can carry
Cause everybody burns
and when it starts to hurt
I cry
I feel it in my veins
I just cant walk away
This time

I hold my head up high
I know i'll be alright this time
ah, ah, ah
ah, ah, ah
Its 4 AM and i'm wide awake
Waiting for my thoughts to fade
And its times like these I see your face

[BWilli]

This Time


Your words trickle in my head
Weight so heavy on my chest
And I'm crushed by your expectation

dunno...kinna sounds like trickle.

[kev222]

This Time


Your words trickle in my head
Weight so heavy on my chest
And I'm crushed by your expectation

dunno...kinna sounds like trickle.

Circle ;-)

Okay, here are my suggestions for hands on me.

A couple of pedantic things in the first verse.

I first saw you at the video exchange
I know my heart and it will never change
This temp work would be alright if you'd call me
You'd call me


An idea for the "decendants growing old" verse. What do you think?

some day when the stories are told
the devils of love like this
when our descendents are all growing old
A thousand years you'll be singing
na na na na na na na na na

Apart from that, it looks like we've got it nailed

[zurielshimon]

Check this and see if it makes sense:

some day when the stories are told
the tale of a love like this
when our descendants are all growing old
a thousand years will be singing
na na na na na na na na na


This, of all, my 1234th post!

[kev222]

See gravity and bend the time (what??)

Change the "and" to a "can" and you've got a line that makes perfect sense Props to V for getting general relativity into a song.

The One
======

Just small stuff again. Most of it is probably not worth bothering with.

Holiday, and I've come home
Hope to see this boy I know
I can't wait for us to be alone

And the tape I made you
Hope you think of me when it plays through
It's kind of sad now that it's done

You think my time's for free
In all the ways you say to me
"Sweet virgin dove lets wait and see"

See gravity can bend the time
Funny how you always blanked your mind
But this whole thing is crushing me

[kev222]

This Time
======

Your words circle in my head
Weight so heavy on my chest
And I'm crushed by your expectation

And do I push too hard, not hard enough
Why can't I keep my big mouth shut
And do we lead the life that we should

And did i say too much again
I'm just a girl in a panic
And if i tell you my truth, what am I getting through?
(this line is a bitch)

[zurielshimon]

See gravity and bend the time (what??)

Change the "and" to a "can" and you've got a line that makes perfect sense Props to V for getting general relativity into a song.

The One
======

Just small stuff again. Most of it is probably not worth bothering with.

Holiday, and I've come home
Hope to see this boy I know
I can't wait for us to be alone

"Hope", that's it!

And the tape I made you
Hope you think of me when it plays through
It's kind of sad now that it's done

You think my time's for free
In all the ways you say to me
"Sweet virgin dove lets wait and see"

Makes sense and sounds right!

See gravity can bend the time
Funny how you always blanked your mind
But this whole thing is crushing me

You have a good ear!

I think the biggest problem we're having with these songs is acoustics, plus her voice (and accent, perhaps) just has a natural tendency to bend vowels.  E sounds like A and A sounds like O, or something like that.

[zurielshimon]

The weight's so heavy on my chest

I only wanna do some good
But darlin' oh, if I could (This line makes no sense.  Any suggestions?)
And I just wanna feel the day I'm in (I'm sure of this one now)

[kev222]

I think the biggest problem we're having with these songs is acoustics, plus her voice (and accent, perhaps) just has a natural tendency to bend vowels.  E sounds like A and A sounds like O, or something like that.

All part of the fun

I have an idea for that killer line in This Time. It's wrong, but crap ideas sometimes lead to good ideas.

And it just seems i started(? sound like shorted ?) fast

And he just seemed assured too fast.
And he just seemed to show despair



Edit: Or I need to see... something.

Bah, this line sucks.

[zurielshimon]

I think the biggest problem we're having with these songs is acoustics, plus her voice (and accent, perhaps) just has a natural tendency to bend vowels.  E sounds like A and A sounds like O, or something like that.

All part of the fun

Don't you know it!

I have an idea for that killer line in This Time. It's wrong, but crap ideas sometimes lead to good ideas.

Just like Edison and the light bulb or Sherlock Holmes!  Once we've found all the wrong words, only the correct words should remain.

[kev222]

But darlin' oh, if I could (This line makes no sense.  Any suggestions?)

How about

I only wanna do some good
Just gotta know, if I could

[kaysha]

But darlin' oh, if I could (This line makes no sense.  Any suggestions?)

How about

I only wanna do some good
Just gotta know, if I could

but i don't know, if i could?

[Scotty]

But darlin' oh, if I could (This line makes no sense.  Any suggestions?)

But "if I could fall into the sky do you think time would pass me" by does?