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« on: July 05, 2004, 09:22:50 pm »
I wrote this on the night of my 13th b-day, so that would explain the title. I just found it the other day with some old school papers lol


I can't really say
Why it feels so quiet,
Why it feels so still
Maybe just 'cause the fan is off,
Or some other kind of distraction
But I never got around to say goodnight to you
And that's making me feel sick

It's midnight, but I'm wide awake,
Still staring at the screen of a computer,
Just hoping seven A.M. will come soon
So I can call you
The alarm isn't ready,
But are you?
'Cause I want to talk to you so bad
I want to know what's really wrong
All I know is these five empty bottles
Don't take away the pain

My body lies here, stiff and numb,
Filthy intoxication
But my heart is heavier
And I know I've held your hand- I still do,
But it's gotten colder
All of the warmth once there
Has twisted and turned into frigid misunderstanding,
Into desparate words to fill up emptiness,
Words that don't mean a thing
And have stripped me of my innocence
And I mean, come on,
Haven't you noticed this distance between us?
A distance where our love once was

It's one 'o' clock and I'm crying now
I need to tell you I still love you
Are you listening?
Please stop running,
Please don't hang up again
I'm hung over on sadness
And I need you here

The alarm isn't ready,
But are you?
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« Reply #1 on: July 06, 2004, 08:25:11 am »
That was amazing - really powerful. Nice work.
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« Reply #2 on: July 06, 2004, 08:35:39 am »
Thanks lol I'd just randomly came across it!
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« Reply #3 on: July 06, 2004, 11:54:01 am »
That was amazing, well done, it was really nice to read!  :) xxx

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« Reply #4 on: July 22, 2004, 03:33:29 am »
I read that before! lol. But it seemed better this time. Its not about...IT is it?
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« Reply #5 on: July 22, 2004, 01:22:27 pm »
Quote from: "SimplyComplex"
I read that before! lol. But it seemed better this time. Its not about...IT is it?


No, Gina, lol that poem is not about "It." I changed the name of this poem too, it's called "Distance" now.
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