Author Topic: "Too far" (Read 7235 times)

c'estlavie · « **on:** February 18, 2004, 05:55:44 am »

ok this is a song i wrote the other day, its not very gd, but feedback wud be nice, good or bad

Too far:

I thought that you were the one for me
But you just let me down
I thought that you were all i need
But where are you now?

You've taken this way too far
It's no use saying your sorry
You've taken this way too far
And there's no turning back

I lay awake and i cry thinking about
The things you used to say
The way you used to smile and i
Felt like you would never go away

You've taken this way too far
It's no use saying you love me
You've taken this way too far
And i don't want you back

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i think i mite add like a bridge to it and something to the end, but oh well.

Lisa xxx

Tia · « **Reply #1 on:** February 18, 2004, 05:57:35 am »

Veeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeery good...don't think it's missing a bridge, but you could try sticking one in there *shrug*

so sorry about the cause hun *hugs*

aleera84 · « **Reply #2 on:** February 18, 2004, 05:59:06 am »

Thats really good Lisa, cant wait to read your other ones

c'estlavie · « **Reply #3 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:03:16 am »

aww thanku sweeties!!! nah i didnt think it needed much more either tia, thats y i posted it. *hugs for both of u!*

Lisa xxx

Tia · « **Reply #4 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:04:51 am »

Haha, okies

And you're welcome! *hug*

c'estlavie · « **Reply #5 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:15:39 am »

hehe *grins*

Tia · « **Reply #6 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:16:13 am »

*pets* :-P

:wink:

c'estlavie · « **Reply #7 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:19:39 am »

hehe bless

Tia · « **Reply #8 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:20:36 am »

*hug*

It's so good to talk to you again, girly!!

c'estlavie · « **Reply #9 on:** February 18, 2004, 06:22:30 am »

u too sweetie. its been a long time

take care

Lisa xxx

rosieposy87 · « **Reply #10 on:** February 18, 2004, 08:34:00 am »

Oh my darling, i really hope you're feeling better and that writing that helped a bit. I really like it, it seems quite catchy- even though i errmm haven't heard the actual tune. I think a bridge would be good. Ooh and you should name is 'Troll', genius at work here i tell you. Bwhahaha

vanessafan18 · « **Reply #11 on:** February 18, 2004, 10:51:17 am »

Awww Lisa that's amazing sweety I love it, and I love you!!! I hope you're okay! You gotta let me hear the whole tune when u have done, you're are just so talented!

*huge hugs for my lisa* Mwah!

Georgie xoxoxox

c'estlavie · « **Reply #12 on:** February 19, 2004, 10:16:15 am »

awww thanku guys. haha "troll", gd thinkin rosie

and georgie, i have the guitar music on my comp, so u can hear that, but it hasnt got the lyrics over the top. my mic wasnt gd enuf to pick up both. lol

and I LOVE YOU TOO!!!!

*hug huges for my fave ppl*

*mwah*

Lisa xxx

Tia · « **Reply #13 on:** February 19, 2004, 10:23:38 am »

Quote from: "c'estlavie"

i have the guitar music on my comp

Oooooooooooooooooooooooh!! *wants to hear it*

c'estlavie · « **Reply #14 on:** February 19, 2004, 10:37:57 am »

hehe it only had enuf room to record the first verse and chorus so far, i'll record the rest at a later time. if u come on msn i can give it to u. hehe *hints*

Lisa xxx

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